Tuesday, April 19, 2016

Week 15: Elevator Pitch No. 4

1). The pitch:


2). Reflection: The majority of the feedback said that they particularly enjoyed my passion and enthusiasm for the venture. The comments were very positive and encouraging about continuing on the same path. A couple people also noted that I made some good adjustments in becoming more organized and deliberate with my speech overall. The feedback that surprised me the most was how many people have noted professionalism in their comments. It is very reassuring to hear others say it because it can feel awkward recording yourself in a dorm room, so it is nice to know that I come off as knowledgeable about the business concept. The only thing I slightly disagreed with was one comment said my idea wasn’t completely unique because it relates to similar customer needs from other ideas. I’m not entirely sure what they meant by this, but this was the only comment with a criticism.


3). Changes from previous elevator pitches: I again tried to make it slightly more casual and use more informal language. I kept a lot of the same content because the comments were so positive. I tried to make this one more conversational, but there are many similarities between this one and my previous pitches. I also added more information about fresh produce and organic options because that seemed popular with previous posts.

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