1). The pitch:
Youtube link: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=WNN3D6cNlW4
2). Reflection:
Three of my four peers had extremely positive comments. The majority of the
feedback said that they particularly enjoyed my passion, professionalism,
enthusiasm, and idea overall. Most of the comments loved the idea and
encouraged moving forward with healthier on campus options at a more affordable
price. They also said I seemed to get the message across in a timely manner to
where they had no questions at the end of the pitch which I really appreciated.
One comment said the idea was “not original whatsoever” and that there was
“some sort of app that already did this he can guarantee”. I’m not entirely
sure what this comment was and it was drastically different from all of the
other feedback on all of the other assignments, so I took notice, but let it go
because I do think that they are wrong. Until you struggle with a dietary
restriction and live on campus, I don’t think you have a right to necessarily
comment on others ‘ struggles, so I personally disagree.
3). Changes from
Elevator Pitch No. 2: I only modified certain wordings to make it slightly
more informal. I kept a lot of the same content because the comments were so
positive. I tried to make this one more conversational, but there are many
similarities between this one and my previous pitch. I also tried to be more
synamic and use more hand gestures to seem more natural.
Hey! I think your idea and background information were pretty solid. Can't say that your idea is completely all that unique because I have seen other elevator pitches relating to similar customer needs, my own idea included. We both focused on dietary needs of students, but I really like the information you gave and the way you introduced that information. I think you have some room still to make your pitch a little more personal and charismatic in order to hook the reader, but overall, great job.
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Michelle,
ReplyDeleteVery good organization and understanding of your product. I think your idea is great. You seem to have a lot of enthusiasm about it and you are not afraid of putting yourself out there to pursue it. Also, great job not only adjusting your elevator pitches but understanding what you adjusted in them and why. Sometimes we see some comments and we change the idea but we do not know why the comment or change was made. When we understand where the other person comes from and why a change may be beneficial, we learn more about our product, the customers, and investors.
You continue to come off very professional and well educated about your product in your speech! I think that's very very good and you should strive to better that every day! Good luck with your product I hope it will be a success!
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Hey Michelle, I think you did a great job and I really enjoyed your post. I feel like you took a lot of feedback from your earlier speeches and have changed your speech for the better. You kept yourself organized and were passionate about your idea. If you have some time be sure to check out my blog! http://biglilcut.blogspot.com/2016/03/elevator-pitch-no-3.html
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